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At The Stroke Of 8PM
By Jill Shaw

Bret Mitchell is a real ladies man. Whenever he sees an
attractive woman, he swoops in and starts hitting on her. It is
at this point that women fall at his feet. The women just find
him irresistible. Bret, of course, has everything to back this
up. He is 29, a junior executive at a big clothing company, he
lives in a loft, and most importantly, he is a sexy hunk of a
man. He, pretty much, has everything.

One day, Bret was really happy. He, for once, got to leave early
from work. Then he planned for tonight. Even though he would be
leaving at 4:30, which is just a 1/2-hour before he usually
leaves, it was still extra time to get ready and go to the clubs.
He said goodbye to some people before he left. Then he quickly
drove off for home, probably a little too quickly.

As he got close to home, he drove past a park where he saw a
bunch of weird looking people who dressed funny. What he didn't
notice was the old lady walking out in the street. He turned
backed to look at road when he finally noticed the old lady. He
did his best to swerve out of her way, but he ended up hitting
her anyway. He got out of his car to see if she was all right,
but when he got out there she was still going on as if nothing
had happened to her and it looked like she didn't look like she
had a scratch on her. Then she glared at Bret and started
mumbling something. Before walking away she said, "You are such a
selfish person. Now at precisely 8:00PM, you will become what you
most desire". Bret got in to his car and drove off, not knowing
what to think.

Bret got home at 5:45 and quickly started to get ready. He also
thought about what the old lady had said. "You will become what
you most desire", Bret remembered the old lady saying. Then he
tried thinking of stuff that he desired like basketball. "I could
become a star basketball player", Bret said, and then realizing
he might become a basketball, which Bret thought would suck. He
also went through a number of different options, like cars or
football. Looking up at the clock, he realized that a lot of time
had passed. Since it was fifteen minutes to 8:00 anyway, Bret
decided to just continue on and when 8:00 comes, he'll see what
happens.

Then Bret got some clothes on. He had on a black shirt over a
white t-shirt, jeans with boxers underneath, and socks and shoes.
He was ready to go at 7:59. As he started to leave the clock
struck 8:00 and he stood still while unable to move. His fingers,
arms, and legs slimmed while the nails on the fingers grew out
1/4 inch past the end of the fingers and the toenails rounded out
and turned pink, as did the fingernails. His feet shrunk and
became delicate and dainty. His legs became supple and grew
lithe. His legs were also getting longer, even though he was
getting shorter and they became smooth. He was previously 5' 11",
but now he was 5' 4". Then his body became curvy when his hips
flared out, his waist thinned, and his ass became heart-shaped.
Breast quickly grew out to a size 38C. Next came his face. His
cheekbones became higher, his nose shrank and got pert, his
eyebrows became pencil thin, his lips grew pouty, fuller and
plump, and his face became round and feminine, while his jaw
narrowed. Suddenly his hair, which was brown but now bright
blonde, lengthened, grew over the ears, passed his neck, spilled
down past his shoulders, and all the way down to the small of his
back.

Then his jeans started to change. The pants fused together, went
up his legs, and changed the fabric until they became a pink
miniskirt that ended just a few inches below his hips. His boxers
became lacy and shrunk into a pink thong. His t-shirt shrunk and
became snug around his newly blossomed breast until it became a
pink push up bra. His shirt lost its' sleeves as they became
spaghetti straps. The shirts' neckline became low cut, revealing
the tops of his breast and showed a significant amount of
cleavage. The newly made tank top then fused with the skirt to
make a skimpy and sexy pink dress. His socks became transparent,
crawled up his legs, and became nude thigh-high pantyhose. His
shoes morphed in to a pair of pink open toed leather sandals with
a feminine 3" heel. Then makeup magically appeared on his face as
if their was an invisible artist painting it on his face.

Then the transformation stopped, and he unfroze, unaware of what
just occurred. He started to leave when he looked down and became
horrified and shocked. He said to himself "Oh my god", in a
higher pitched voice. "I can't believe it", he said. She then
walked back into the bedroom and picked up her purse off her
vanity. "Like, oh my god", she said. "Like, I almost forgot my
purse", she also said. "Like, I can't leave home without it", she
said before getting into her car. Britney Andrews, 25, had some
plans for tonight which included clubbing and landing her dream
hunk. She drove off looking for the hottest club in town.

To Be Continued…
Guy upset a old lady, who then places a curse on him. A curse that activates every night at 8PM. A very sexy curse... ;)

It's been a while since I posted anything new, so I thought posting this would something nice for you guys and girls.

Also just realized this is my 50th deviation posted. So yea, why not make it special by making my 50th deviation my first tg story ever written. :D :w00t:

This is the first tg story I ever wrote (under the name Jill Shaw; not my real name, of course). I was 15 at the time, so I was still kind of young and inexperienced. It got some nice feedback. Some gave compliments. Others gave advice on what and how to improve in my tg writing (which I hope I have improved on since then). This was both fun and tough to write. On the one hand, it was fun to write out a tg transformation. On the other hand, writing a tg story (and pretty much, writing in general) is pretty tough. But once I was finished, it felt so good to get it done. Considering how tough it was to write a tg story and how much I needed to improve in my writing, I just never got around to writing another tg story... until a certain tg comic artist asked for ideas for tg comics. And the rest is history. :)

Hope you like my first attempt at tg storytelling. :)

ps - I know it says "To Be Continued" at the end of the story. I originally meant to follow up on this story by having the curse get worse and it starts activating when he least expects it and his reality changes to hers. For example, Bret would be sitting in a board meeting when the curse would activate and now, Britney would be at the board meeting to serve coffee to the executives instead. Or Bret would be having sex with a girl at his apartment and then the curse would activate and now, Britney is having sex with a guy at her apartment. The story was going to be a bit epic. So, considering my writing skills at the time, I just never got around to continuing that story. Not sure if I ever will. Maybe, maybe not. We'll see. If any of you are interested in writing a follow up to this story, let me know. :)
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Omega-Knight-X97M Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2015  Student Digital Artist
It has to sucks when all your work, which is nice.
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shadowalex3000 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
Im sad that all of your captions are gone.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
Yea, me too. I've been a bit busy lately (holidays and stuff), but when I get a couple of hours, I'm going to sit down and post them on a new site, most likely a blogspot page.
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formthefemale Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it!
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Thank you! Glad you luv it! :D
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giygas1 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
I like the idea of the bastard getting what he deserves.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
i do too. alot of my stories are like that. bad men getting their just desserts. wish that could happen in real life. :)
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giygas1 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
anyone in particular you have in mind?
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
no not really. just the usual sleazy creeps who gawk and hit on me with lame lines. jerks who just want me to get laid and thats it. im a person who is more than a hot body. i have feelings and a brain but those sleazy jerks wouldnt know that or care to know that.

at least there are some good guys still out there. i just have to find them in a sea of creeps.
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DominiqueMelted Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
We are definitely out here. I'm a good man, a decent man, with intelligence and with off-beat tastes and desires. Cute and hot and all that is great -- for a very, very short time. Looks fade, but smarts are forever [although I've know intelligent people who've thrown it away on addiction to drugs -- maybe not so smart?]. There is a saying:
Inferior minds talk about other people; mediocre minds talk about things; superior minds talk about ideas.
If I can't talk about ideas to my girlfriend [when I've had one] and share my deviant art, then there is no point.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Oh nice. I like that saying. :)
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giygas1 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
a hot body and a brain with more than 2 brain cells is what my dream girl would be. the mind and soul are the most important, i'm still a guy, and still have the urge for a controllable bimbo, but i repress that to the best of my ability.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
glad to hear that.

also i get you. i would like a guy who is good looking and smart but there are times when i find myself liking cute and dumb. i try not to think that way because while that sounds nice after a while the dumb part will get annoying and makes the cute part not worth it.
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giygas1 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
nice to know i'm not the only one, and since you write erotica i feel inclined to ask, why is it bimbos desrcibe themselves or the guy their fucking as "yummy"? just seems out of place is all
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
from what i can tell "yummy" is just a cute and silly word they use to say how sexy they or a guy they like is. like if a bimbo saw a guy she thought was cute and said he is so yummy what she is saying is "he is so hot and sexy that i so would luv to get a taste of that... mmm!" or if a bimbo describes herself as yummy she is saying that "im so sexy that all the cute guys will want to get a taste of me... and more." so i guess its just a cute and silly way for a bimbo to say she or a guy she thinks is cute is hot and sexy.

this might help. heres some definitions form urban dictionary (definitions 1, 3, 6(2), and 7 really should help): [link]

hope i was of some help. :)
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MellissaLynn Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
For a first story, this is excellent! And yes, you're a much better writer (technically, I mean) than you were whenyou wrote this, I think. :)
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
thank you mellissa! its really good to know that im improving and that this story was actually pretty good! thank you! :heart: :D :heart:
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TheDarkNeon Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well..naaahh...I'll let somebody MORE willing to take on the tale. I already got PLENTY on my plate. my heroes, Batman, Nightmare on elm street fanfics and more ideas brewing. let some up and coming writer have a crack.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
thats kewl. :)

if youre interested one of my deviantart watchers is working on a follow up to the story. shes up to part 6. you can check it out on her deviantart page: [link]
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Freshbboy Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
i liked it
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
kewl! thank you! :)
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God-bless-you-all Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome story, Amber! :D
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
yay! thank you! glad you enjoyed it! i was so young when i wrote that. i guess ive come so far. :D
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Onyx-the-Tek Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey Amber,

Would yo mind if I continued the story in one of my captions.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
sure. im interested in seeing your take on the story.
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Onyx-the-Tek Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thx, Would like to hear one of my ideas for the story?
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
youre welcome. and sure. whats the idea?
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Onyx-the-Tek Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My idea is that everyday he changes into Brittany 1 our earlier and changes back one hour later, so that he has only 5 days to find a cure.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
thats a kewl idea. my idea was that originally the curse would only start at 8pm but then get worse by starting anytimewhen brent would least expect it. i like your take though. looking forward to reading the next part. :)
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Onyx-the-Tek Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
youre welcome.
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Ferzin-the-hedgehog Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
I'ts pretty good for a first, in my opinion.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
thanks. :)
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Ferzin-the-hedgehog Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
no problem
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Onyx-the-Tek Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you like so much for uploading this. Ya know we like should talk with each other more often you seem like such a rockin' gal, I would totally love to talk with ya!
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
youre very welcome! :)

oh thats sounds so kewl! you have yahoo messenger? we could chat on there.
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Onyx-the-Tek Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey Amber,

I like totally don't have yahoo messenger but, I'm downloading it right now. By the way I just uploaded my first caption I would luv to know what you think.
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AmberSmyth Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
oh kewl! i will check it out now. :)
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